Beauchi
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 | Тема: training ninjutsu weak to ok  Май 9th 2007, 21:49 | |
| One day I wanted to train my ninjutsu so I decided to train it. I went to the training grounds and trained my ninjutsu with my sword. When I was done training I went to a restaurant and bought a great dinner, I then got back home and jumped into my bed, I was glad that I was stonger.
-400 words sword
(done training)
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Akarmaru
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| | Тема: Re: training ninjutsu weak to ok Май 9th 2007, 21:54 | |
| two things wrong one you need to use the sword second of all not enough words | |
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Beauchi
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| | Тема: Re: training ninjutsu weak to ok Май 9th 2007, 21:57 | |
| what do you mean not enough woreds? and i'll change it | |
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Akarmaru
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| | Тема: Re: training ninjutsu weak to ok Май 10th 2007, 23:21 | |
| ok now you can make it ok | |
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